Mentor’s comment-
- In the introduction briefly explain the background of the question using some facts to justify it.
- In the body you can start with, India is home to nearly 150 million people with some degree of disability. Discuss the unique challenges faced by people with disabilities. Highlight the concerns.
- Conclude with solutions and suggest that there is the need for a humane response with affirmative action for people with disabilities
Comments
25 responses to “With their distinctive issues and vulnerability, people with disabilities need much more upkeep than the rest of the population in the face of a pandemic. Comment. 10 marks”
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Hi Parakh
Good introduction
In the issues, you have written very general points.write about mental health issues,people with communication disabilities don’t know how to express their problems, write about the problems and vulnerability of women with disability.
In measures,write about SDGs,explain the need of inclusive society etc.
You have written a general answer.
Try to diversify your answer to get good marks.
Conclusion is good.
Improve your handwriting,write neat and legible.
Work hard !
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Hi Taran
Good introduction.
Work on presentation,if you are making flow chart then make it proper or else write in points.
Some good points in the issues part but need to add more content,you can add mental health issues, problem in maintaining social distancing as they are dependent on some other person,problems with disabled children etc.
Brainstorm before writing!
Cover more aspects in your answer to get good marks.
Lack of content is there in suggestions also.
Work on presentation and handwriting.
Keep writing !
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Hi Shubham
Good introduction but need to summarise it.
Write crisp and concise.
Challenges are well explained.
In measures,write about SDGs,need of decreasing waiting time in hospitals for them,technology-savvy professionals can help to make information available in an accessible format etc.
Also explain the need of inclusive society .
Diversify your content.
Good conclusion.
Overall a decent attempt.
You have the potential of writing good answers, keep writing , you will succeed.
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Hi Deepika
Thumbs up for introduction.
There are some good points in issues part but also add mental health issues and about the problem of disabled children.
The question is asking with reference to pandemic so door to door campaigning is not a feasible idea.
You can add that there should be dedicated helpline,need of decreasing waiting time in hospitals for them,technology-savvy professionals can help to make information available in an accessible
format etc.
Write according to the demand of the question.
Conclusion is good.
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Amandeep
Rephrase your introduction.
Use proper heading and subheading to present your answer in a better way.
You did not mention the issues faced by them in this pandemic, first write issues then suggest the steps to be taken.
Read mentor’s comment before writing,it will help you in writing good answers.
The question is not asking the degrees of disability .
You have deviated from the demand of the question.
In way forward, very general points are there in your answer, try to add diverse points like dedicated helpline, write about SDGs,explain the need of inclusive society etc.
You need to work upon content as well structure of the answer.
Do not get demotivated by the marks,
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Dakshina
Good introduction.
Use of flow char is appreciable.
In the care part,your first and second point can be merged into one, do nit write about people without disabilities, be crisp and concise while writing,
Need to add points in way forward,like SDG, dedicated helpline,civil
society volunteers should help etc.
Add dimensions to your answer.
Stick to the demand of the question.
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting.
Keep working hard !
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Hi NJ
Good introduction.
You have discussed the issues part in a good manner but also add the problems of mentally disabled people.
Way forward is good ,you can add more points like need of inclusive society, SDG, dedicated helpline,civil society volunteers should help etc .
Good conclusion.
Overall a decent attempt.
Content is good and well placed.
Keep it up !
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Hi Sneha
Good introdution.
Thumbs up for the issues part.
Content is diversified.
Answer is well structured.
You have written the way forward in a beautiful manner.
This answer can be the model answer,keep it up !
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Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Chester
Rephrase your introduction.
Use headings properly, instead of writing’challenges they face are following’ , you can write only ‘challenges’ or ‘issues faced by disabled people’.
Some good points in the challenges part but need to add more. Write about mental health issues and about the problem of disabled children and elderly.
Way forward is good,keep it up.
Work on basic grammar,there are so many grammatical errors in your answer.
Improve handwriting and presentation to get better marks.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Unnati
Need to rephrase your introduction.
Work on grammar, always write noun with capital alphabet, for example it is ‘India’ not ‘india’ .
Some good points but you have written the general difficulties faced by the disabled people, the question is demanding specifically in the time of pandemic.
When you have already given the heading – challenges faced by disabled , then do not write agin that these are the challenges faced by…
Write crisp and concise.
Add points in measures that there should be dedicated helpline,need of decreasing waiting time in hospitals for them,technology-savvy professionals can help to make information available in an accessible format etc.
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting.
Keep writing !
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Hi Venkatesh
Try to complete your answer in maximum 2 pages.
Adhere to word limit.
Good introduction.
You have explained the issues and measures in a quite comprehensive manner.
Keep it up .
Always end your answer with some concluding remarks.
You can conclude by suggesting that there is the need for a humane response with affirmative action for people with disabilities.
Avoid grammatical errors .
Underline important stuff.
Write crisp and concise.
Keep writing !
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Hi Teja
First thing, scan your answer sheet in proper light.
Good introduction.
You have explained the difficulties in a good manner but lack of content in the suggested strategy.
How can we show them movies in this pandemic situation ? Brainstorm before writing.
Add points in measures that there should be dedicated helpline,need of decreasing waiting time in hospitals for them,technology-savvy professionals can help to make information available in an accessible format etc.
Good conclusion.
Underline keywords.
Keep writing , you will improve.