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Introduction – define emotional intelligence.
Body –
Explain what is intelligence and emotions.
Explain how emotional intelligence is neither emotions alone nor intelligence. It is way different.
Use examples to substantiate your arguments.
Conclusion – conclude on importance of emotional intelligence for civil servants.
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Murari 2,
Your Introduction can Conclusion are fine.
In your answer you have written only Written what is EI and mentioned it’s components.
In third paragraph you have reproduced question. Rather Depict it your write up. First differentiate between emotions and Intelligence than talk about how EI is something else with example.
Read question properly, take Mentor’s Comments help if necessary. Frame answer in mind than write.
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Subhashree ,
More refined definition of EI can be given in intro, use an example here it will give more depth.
You have Written good answer it can be better if you mold your Arguments in second part like you did for self regulation in which the intersection between emotions and Intelligence is quite apparant.
Rest is fine.
Overall a good Attempt. Keep practicing đ
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Ankita ,
Introduction is fine addition of an Example can give it more depth.
It has been pointed out on previous occasions that you will get 2 pages for 10 marks and 3 for 15. Dont repeat this again.
You keeps repeating the same mistakes of writing long paragraphs.
Section about intelligence and emotions can be written in one paragraphs with Examples. But you have taken almost a page for it.
There is repetition in your answer.
Focus on core demand about EI being interaction, use your Examples here. Not in the end.
Write importance in Conclusion.
See you have knowledge but you have written unnecessarily long answer which overshadowed your idea.
Stick to the demand of the question. If you think something is necessary to mention other then asked in question be brief about it.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
3.5/10
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Vishal,
Introduction is fine can be better with addition of an Example.
You have addressed EI part really well how ever before jumping to it you must define emotions and Intelligence with examples then only it’ll make sense to write about their interaction.
Used ‘Compassion’ really well but example following that is not related to your write up so write examples which are compatible with your arguments.
Conclusion is very well articulated. Rest if fine. Keep practicing đ
3.5/10
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Deepika,
Introduction is fine add an example to give depth to your Introductions.
Always label your diagrams otherwise they make no sense.
Before talking about intersection you should define emotions with example. Do it in a paragraph along with intelligence.
Your presentation is very poor there is not clear separation among the parts where your one section ends and another starts.
Arguments are very generic in nature. First clearly write how EI is intersection of both then write example. Examples always are supportive in nature without effective arguments they are not convincing. So give Arguments then followed by brief examples.
Read others answer for better understanding. Keep practicing:)
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Harsha,
You need to read the question properly. It doesn’t ask you to write about importance of EI.
How EI is neither being emotional nor intelligent. It’s unique blend of both.
First define both emotions and Intelligence then depict their interactions.
You don’t need to make a question unnecessarily complicated.
Address question is simple and direct manner, write all the aspects.
Take help of mentor’s comments.
Don’t repeat mistakes.
Keep practicing:)
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@swatantra .sir on self review…I found this answer below par…I again struggled with the abstract question. I am not able to structe the ‘Illustrate with examples’ part …whether to give examples along with every point or give an example that sums up the question
Rohan,
You started you answer well but lost the track from third paragraph, Introduction can be better with an example.
For showing interaction of two entities you first need to define them so define emotions.
The core idea is EI is neither being emotional and nor being intelligent it’s unique blend of both i.e. EI means ’emotions in reasoning and reasoning with emotions’.
But your have Written essentially the importance of EI which is not the core demand. So mold your knowledge as per the Demand of the question.
Now coming to your doubt.
See you must understand that examples are always supportive elements. They have no basis without effective arguments.
Examples add value but can’t be sole part of your answer.
It’s same like science theories are basis of inventions not other way around.
So write Example with every point if possible. one example that sums up is not a good way to give example.
Short crisp 1-2 line example is what I will see as good example One long long example is waste of page And words.
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Santosh,
Your Introduction is fine. Brief Example to give depth to your answer.
Santosh you have fine understanding of ethics terms but there is an issue with your answer.
Almost same with your last answer.
You are dealing various terms mentioned in the question in Isolation, which seems mechanical and make less sense.
You have to write an answer which connects all the aspects of questions together.
Like in this question after writing about emotions and Intelligence you should have written EI is neither being emotional nor intelligent it’s a unique blend of both i.e. reasoning in emotions and emotions in reasonings.
Then write your second Part in that direction. Use examples to substantiate your arugements.
Read question properly, understand it’s demand, think about it, link all the aspect, frame your answer then write.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Rajlaxmi,
Introduction is fine.
It seems you have written answer without understanding question.
Essentially you have written ‘the importance of the EI’. It’s not the core demand of the question. Rather you have to depict how EI is neither being emotional not intelligent it’s interaction of the two.
That is Reasoning in emotions and emotions in Reasoning.
Before showing interaction of two entities you should define them then only interaction will make sense.
You have fine idea about EI but need to mold your arguments. Stick to the core demand of the question.
Write 1-2 line crisp examples with your Arguments. That is the better way of using examples.
And scan properly your answer before uploading.
Keep practicing.
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Kartikey,
Your introduction is good.
But you seems to have interpreted the answer very narrowly. You have explained the dimension of emotional intelligence is not opposite to intelligence. There was a second dimensions to question also – how emotions intelligence is not triumph of heart alone.
Also, try to use words mentioned in the question in your answer. It will ensure that you don’t deviate from demand of questions.
The word used in question by intelligence and not “IQ”.
Also, don’t use abbreviations without first explaining them. Eg you used “IQ” , EQ.
Also, conclusion is not also upto the mark. Here the lack of understanding of demand of question is very apparent.
Read question carefully before attempting. Also, try to get idea of demand of question from mentors comment.
Keep writing to improve further
2.5/10
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Please review @Swatantra Sir
You have not understood the demand of the question.
The question was how emotional intelligence is not only emotions and not only intelligence. But a unique synthesis of both.
You have written everything except attending this demand of the question.
You were supposed to explain emotions. How they alone are not emotional intelligence.
Again, explain what is intelligence and how it alone is not emotional intelligence.
Then explain how emotional intelligence uniquely integrate both emotions and intelligence.
Read question carefully before writing.
Also, don’t use abbreviations without explaining them -“EQ” “IQ” ??
Keep writing to improve further
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Shivanshu,
Write more refined definition of EI it is much more than an organisational skill.
You have started addressing question in Right direction on first page but lost the track on second page.
Rather on second page depict attributes of EI as unique intersection of emotions and Intelligence. Substantiate with Examples.
You’ll get marks only for relevant content so stick to the demand of the question.
Keep practicing for further improvement.
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Vishnu ,
Introduction is fine add example to enhance its value.
In second paragraph you should have defined emotions as well before showing interactions between head and heart.
Second section is written good however it would be better if you write 1-2 line crisp example with each argument writing one in the end is not a good way.
Conclusion can be improved upon.
Keep practicing đ
kindly review @swatantra sir
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Deepali.
Read the question properly. It’s doesn’t ask you to write utilities of EI.
Take your time, understand the Demand of the Question take help from Mentor’s Comments , Frame your answer then write.
Here you need to depict how EI doesn’t mean being emotional or just intelligent. Rather it’s intersection of both.
So mold your knowledge to write what is asked in the question not what you know.
Read others answer Keep practicing:)
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