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Introduce your answer with some facts related to violence and discrimination against women in India.
In Body first explain why strong laws are required for women related violence and discrimination in our country.
Then discuss the reasons for the misuse of these laws.
Write way forward- how to overcome this kind of crisis.
Conclude with remarks related to benefit that Women empowerment bring to the society.
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Shubhashree,
You have Written very well articulated Introduction and Conclusion. This the pattern I am observing since last few questions. Keep it up.
In the body however you need to mold the Arguments. You failed to address the demand of the question which I do not expect from you.
Here you had to write in first section why We need strong laws but you have mentioned various laws. Section in Diagram needs to Written in detail. As this is the Core part of the Question.
In Second Section you had to write why these laws are being Misuse not why they failed. Also as per the Hon. SC capital punishment must be awarded in rarest of the rare case so you should mind the application of this doctrine and should not mentioned capital punishment so liberally.
So write Arguements as per the demand of the Question.
Now about your doubt- the statement is negative light also second part of the statement about laws is not clear as there are laws which are applicable irrespective of the time.
You can use this statement with better framing under header like parochial Social Attitude (for first section) and misguided political preference (for second).
I hope this clears your doubt.
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Aabha ,
You have addressed all the Aspects of the Question but Arguements are very generic in nature.
Quote source of the fact to make your argument more credible in the Introduction.
Also write facts for supporting your points in the body.
In first section you can divide reason for stringent laws into field like administrative apathy, social ignorance etc.
Same In the next section use better arguments like Misapplication and misinterpretation of various acts, Absence of gender neutrality in legislation (for example no protection of men in Domestic Violence Act, 2005), In very rare case, a complainant is punished for filing false complaints etc.
With better points as mentioned above you can modify your points in way Forward as well.
Conclusion is fine.
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Rajlaxmi,
You have Written a good Introduction.
You have Written many facts it’s good if you could remember such facts.
In first section you had just mentioned Various laws rather you had to write why need stringent laws in first place.
Second section is Written very well though more points can be added here.
I have suggested you this earlier as well that You should always write solutions whenever you write issues or negatives. You have missed that.
Conclusion is fine.
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Ankita ,
Your Introduction to the question is well Written.
In first section you can divide reason for stringent laws into field like administrative apathy, social ignorance etc. Also Inculcate fact to Support your argument.
In Second Section you need to write better arguments rather then writing points that you have Written as your last point. Here you can write points like Misapplication and misinterpretation of various acts, Absence of gender neutrality in legislation (for example no protection of men in Domestic Violence Act, 2005), In very rare case, a complainant is punished for filing false complaints etc.
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Rajesh,
You have Written a good Introduction but it’s very long. Use one or two fact rest use in first section of the body.
In first section you have just mentioned Various laws rather you need to give reasons for the need of such laws. Here you can divide reason for stringent laws into field like administrative apathy, social ignorance etc. Here Inculcate fact to Support your argument.
In paragraph Before second section you should write better facts rather then giving such random example. If it’s any famous case then it’s fine. Otherwise avoid such points. Also PoA Act deals with crime against SC/ST Communities. Rather here you should quote domestic violence Act.
Rest is Written very well.
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Kartikey,
Your Introduction is very good. You need to write better Conclusion.
You have not addressed the first section of the question. Give more detail writeup about why We need strong laws in first place.
Second Part of the Question is very well addressed. Here it would be better if you can quote facts related to specific laws such as Issue of gender neutrality in domestic violence Act.
Rest is Written really well.
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Arpit,
Your Introduction is fine but is lengthy. You should concise it in to one para.
You have not addressed the first section of the question. Give more detail writeup about why We need strong laws in first place.
Here you can divide reason for stringent laws into field like administrative apathy, social ignorance etc. Here Inculcate fact to Support your argument.
Second section is Written fine Here you can add points like Misapplication and misinterpretation of various acts, Absence of gender neutrality in legislation (for example no protection of men in Domestic Violence Act, 2005), In very rare case, a complainant is punished for filing false complaints etc.
Rest is Written fine.
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