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Introduce answer with the Your understanding of the statement.
In main body, depict how various political-ideological features acquired by India during freedom struggle had decisive impact on post independence development path/ policies.
Conclude your answer by pointing out the deepness of this impact that even various challenges that India faced after Independence could not alter it.
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Gauri Shankar,
You must write Introduction in your world’s rather than reproduction of the statement.
You have understood the question and written in right direction. However you need to take note of following things-
1. Before using any acronym always write full form.
2. There is no such Act named triple talaq (prohibition)Act. Rather it’s known as The Muslim Women (Protection of Rights on Marriage) Act, 2019. Avoid doing such mistake.
3. More importantly while linking present path with independence movement use clear references.
For examples for five year planning use planning commission 1938,
For Fundamental Rights- Karachi resolution of 1931 etc.
Conclusion is fine.
Rest is fine. Keep writing 🙂
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Anupam,
Introduction is fine but can better.
You have understood the question and written on the right lines but there are following Issues-
1. Gandhi ji was not a socialist, avoid making such factual errors.
2. You need to use better pre-independence facts to depict impression on policies like Planning committee of 1938 and post independence five year plan, Karachi resolution 1931 and Fundamental Rights in the Constitution etc.
3. You must never question ideals of freedom struggle. Your conclusion shows them in negative light. Use better words but for policies not for ideals. Even in LPG Reforms India didn’t compromised upon its ideals of freedom struggle they are in very basis of the Constitution and polity.
4. Add more points to you answer like Secularism, foreign policy etc
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2.5/10
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Deepika,
Your Introduction is fine but mention of partition is not required.
You have content but you failed to understand the demand of the question.
You have Written what British did and how India build upon that.
But the Demand of the question is that you have to show the influence of various ideals, that our forefathers followed while fighting for India’s freedom, on the post independence policies of India.
For example Values such as democratic Rights, Fundamental Rights adopted in Karachi resolution of 1931, enshrine in our Constitution,
Due to Socialist influence on economic outlook (planning committee 1938) led to planning based development.
Indian Freedom fighters stood for independence of all colonies, and principle of non-interference are visible in our foreign policies.
Conclusion is not at all appropriate as per the question.
You have content but Read question properly, understand the demand of the question take help of Mentor’s Comments if necessary.
Read others’ answers as well and Keep writing for further improvement:)
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Soundarya,
First of all, UPSC will give you two pages for a 10 marks question. So follow UPSC standard It’ll help you in management of space in Mains.
Your Introduction and Conclusion are fine.
You have understood the question well and Written on the right lines.
However to add value to your answer, need to give specific facts to depict impression such Karachi Resolution on Fundamental Rights 1931, Planning committee of 1938, Ghandhiji’s constructive program etc.
Also add more fields such as foreign policy, Women issues, 73rd and 74th Constitutional Amendment Acts etc.
You have good understanding of the topic, just diversify your answer and use appropriate facts to give depth.
Keep writing:)
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Utkarsha,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are fine.
You have understood the Question but there are follow Issues-
1. Question is about India’s development path not on Pt. Nehru’s tenure and his actions. So use term India, also you need to go beyond 1950-60, even present day India following path on the ideals of freedom struggle.
2. Core demand of the question is how ideals that our freedom fighters believed in while fighting for India’s freedom, influenced India’s policies post-independence.
But you have focused on how British did wrong to India and how India corrected it.
For example, due to socialist influence (planning committee 1938) India adopted planning based development model,
Congress Always Supported all the anti-colonial struggle around the world and principal of self determination and non interference it’s reflected in Foreign policy of India
3. You’ll not get marks for making random graphs diagrams in Mains.
Try to Inculcate them in your answer. And always label them.
You have enough content, just mold it as per the Demand of the question.
Keep writing for further improvement:)
3.5/10
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Arpit,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are fine.
You have understood the question well and Written on the same lines.
However there is still a lot of scope of improvement. Take note of following-
1. You can add more section in your answer and divide various policies under headers such as democratic Practices- civil rights, Secularism, economic policies- planning, mixed economy, Social policy, foreign policy etc.
2. Need to add more facts like Wardha scheme to support your Arguments like Karachi Resolution on Fundamental Rights and civil liberties, planning committee of 1938 etc.
Also add some recent decisions like Constitutional recognition of Cooperative, Panchayati Raj etc
3. You need to prioritize your points. More important ones should come first.
You have good understanding of the topic, try to give more depth to your answer using facts and diversified Arguments.
Keep Writing for further improvement 🙂
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Rajlaxmi,
You have not addressed the demand of the question at all.
I suggest you to read question properly, think about it, understand the demand of the question then write.
Demand of the question is how ideals that our freedom fighters believed in while fighting for India’s freedom, influenced India’s policies post-independence.
For example,
Ideals like democratic rights, Civil Rights etc were held fast by our forefathers as apparent in adoption of Karachi resolution 1931 are enshrined in our Constitution as fundamental rights,
due to socialist influence (planning committee 1938) India adopted planning based development model,
Congress Always Supported all the anti-colonial struggle around the world and principal of self determination and non interference it’s reflected in Foreign policy of India
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Vishal,
Your Introduction is fine and Conclusion Written better.
You have understood the question and written on the right lines however demand of the question could not met satisfactorily.
Except point 4, you failed to depict clear link between India’s development path and influence of the past.
You must use facts from India’s struggled to support your Arguments. With which answer in incomplete.
Add more points related to Gandhian Values, Congress Socialist values etc.
For better presentation you can divide answer under headings. Rest is fine.
Keep writing for further improvement;)
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Ankita,
Your Introduction is fine but try to limit it to one paragraph.
You should give 3/4 space to your main body so use space wisely.
You could have used second paragraph and points under main body.
You have understood the Demand of the question. But you haven’t satisfactorily addressed the demand of the question.
You must write what facts/ideals related to India’s struggle influenced development path. This organic link is a core demand in a nut shell.
For eg. 1. Congress believe in linguistics freedom and its reorganisation on the same lines in 1920s
2. Freedom fighter coming across religion and its being core to value system of congress
3. Congress supported anti-colonial movement and principle of non interference – panchsheel and NAM
For example
Also this question is about India’s development path not Pt. Nehru’s tenure. So better to use term India and go beyond 1950-60 and include even recent examples like Constitutional backing to Cooperatives, PRI based on Gandhian ideals.
Try to cover all the aspects of the question and Keep writing:)
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Kartikeya
Introduction is very well articulated.
You have understood the Demand of the question and did justice to it.
It would be better if you’d use more facts to support your points like Karachi Resolution 1931, Planning Committee 1938, lessons learnt under Congress ministries – federalism etc.
Instead using socialism better to write Indian Socialism or Democratic socialism.
Rest is fine. Overall a very good Attempt, keep writing:)
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Rupesh,
You should Write introduction focused only on India as we have our own unique case and it’d also reflect that you have pride in the ideals that Inspired India’s struggle for freedom.
You have understood the Question and covered it’s demand to an extent.
However there is dominance of one are i.e. Economy in your answer.
It’d we better if you make various paths of development as headings than connecting them with various Ideals.
This will help you in covering more areas including Civil liberties, secularism, foreign policies etc. And avoid repetition.
(Fact correction- Neta ji was Socialist not capitalist.)
Conclusion can be written better.
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Aabha ,
You must remember that you’ll get only 2 pages for a 10 marker. follow upsc standard.
Your Introduction and Conclusion are essentially same in meaning, can be Written much better.
Try to be more concise and direct in your expression. Write more effective points.
In Political better to write democratic system of Polity as Congress was organised democratic lines, values like Fundamental Rights, Civil Rights are influenced from Karachi resolution of 1931,
Planning is the result of Socialists influence in the Congress goes back to 1938 planning Committee.
Try to be more concise, back your Arguments with facts.
Read others’ answers for better understanding. And keep writing:)
3.5/10
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Harshaa,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are Written fine.
You have understood the question and Written in the right direction.
You need to add more argument in your answer.
Cover areas like social justice, Secularism, economic policies.
Better way to write is to make various areas as headings and writing 2-3 points in each with point out with facts clear linking between path followed after independence and ideal of freedom struggle.
Expand your discussion in multiples areas, your line of thinking is fine.
Read others answer for better understanding. Keep writing:)
2.5/10
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Sushmita
Remember that you’ll get only 2 pages for a 10 marker. So follow upsc standard.
Your Introduction is good but it’s lengthy, concise it.
You have understood the Demand of the question and Written well.
There is nothing much to add.
You must link first two headings explicitly with the freedom struggle like you did for the rest of the points.
Conclusion is very well articulated.
Overall a good Attempt, keep writing:)
5.5/10
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Shivanshu,
Your Introduction is fine.
You have understood the Demand of the question and did Justice to it to an extent.
Few points that you need to take notice of-
1. If you have time write fullname before using acronym.
2. Improve your expression of language a bit, write clear sentences.
3. Organise your points better. points written under Social sphere belongs to economic sphere.
Add more points related women, vulnerable sections, foreign policy etc.
Conclusion is written well. But remember you’ll get only 2 pages for a 10 marks question.
Keep writing:)
4.5/10
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Mradul,
Your Introduction is written fine. However what you Written in first three paragraph can be Written in just one.
You should give 3/4 space to your main body.
In your answer except last point you failed in establishing a clear organic link between path that India followed and freedom struggle ideal influenced them.
Use facts, events to establish such link.
For example Congress organised itself on democratic lines. Also it constitute assembly based on universal adult franchise for forming Constitution of India.
Karachi resolution on Fundamental Rights 1931
Socialist influence on freedom movements Zamindari abolition etc.
You must write more optimistic Conclusion as despite nature of Economy India still following Ideals that Inspired our freedom struggle.
Keep writing for further improvement 🙂
3.5/10
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