Mentor’s comment-
- In the introduction briefly explain current context – highlight the case before Kerala high court.
- In the body discuss the features of Special Marriage Act first. Explain in what way it discriminates against same sex couples who want to formalize their relationship through marriage. Analyse the aspects of the rights of same-sex couples. Discuss the social purpose of marriage in general and in what way Indian society is yet to re-look at the old and outdated practices. Suggest measures that need to be taken to make marriage more inclusive in the country.
- Conclude that it’s high time for our society to put an end to the homophobic tradition and make marriage, as an institution, as a legal concept, more accessible and egalitarian, less arbitrary and
exclusionary.
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20 responses to “Is the concept of marriage less exclusionary in our country? In the context of same-sex marriage, discuss the need for a multi-pronged approach to deal with issue of prejudice and discrimination prevalent in society against them. 10 marks”
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Hi Parakh
Lackluster introduction,briefly explain current context – highlight the case before Kerala high court.
Avoid drawing a line between the paragraphs.
Lack of content in your answer.
Write about the challenges posed to SMA 1954 then explain the need for a multi-pronged approach to deal with issue of prejudice and discrimination prevalent in the society.
Explain briefly how the petition before the Kerala High Court represents a unique opportunity towards making marriage more exclusionary.
Read mentor’s comment before writing.
Work on basic grammar and improve your handwriting.
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Hi Dakshina
Rephrase your introduction, so many grammatical errors are there.
Work on your headings, if you are writing about the challenges posed to SMA 1954, then mention it clearly .
Write that same-sex marriage is recognised in nearly 30 countries across the world, mention some countries.
Social significance of marriage is well explained.
Work on concluding remarks, explain briefly how the petition before the Kerala High Court represents a unique opportunity towards making marriage more exclusionary.
Work on handwriting , write neat and legible.
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Kritika
Good introduction.
You have explained the problems with SMA in a decent manner.
After challenges explain the need for a multi-pronged approach to deal with issue of prejudice and discrimination prevalent in the society.
Rest of the content is quite decent.
Work on basic grammar.
Work on spellings.
Underline keywords to convince the examiner easily.
Keep working hard !
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Hi Chester
Lackluster introduction, briefly explain current context – highlight the case before Kerala high court.
Keep your content updated with current affairs to fetch better marks.
Be specific in your headings, instead of giving heading ‘why this is an issue’ , write ‘problems with same sex marriage in India’.
Work on presentation of your answer to fetch better marks.
Rest of the content is good and well placed.
Good conclusion.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Avoid grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.
Persistence is the key to success,keep writing !
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Hi PS0095
Good introduction.
Before writing about the restrictions on homosexual couples, explain briefly the challenges posed to SMA 1954.
Use of flow chart is appreciable.
Explain how recognition of same-sex marriage will enrich the democratic culture in India .
In the approach part, all the points are good except education one, instead of telling them the demerits of unnatural family, educate them how to deal with the challenges.
Good conclusion.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Deepika
Try to complete your answer in maximum two pages, adhere to word and space limit.
Good introduction.
You have explained the SMA and its issues in a comprehensive manner, keep it up !
Use of flow chart is appreciable.
Content is good and well placed.
Merge measures and way ahead to save space.
Good conclusion.
Overall a good attempt.
Work on space management.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Uttam
Lackluster introduction, mention the recent Kerala high court case.
You have deviated from the demand of the question, the question is not asking the various perspectives of marriage, instead it is asking the problems with same sex marriage and how to deal with it.
Read mentor’s comment before writing.
Work on content.
Take a clue from Deepika’s answer for content and structure.
Work on handwriting .
Avoid grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.
Do not get demotivated by the marks,keep writing, you will improve.
ok sir i will improve.
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Hi Sneha
Good introduction.
Explain briefly the SMA 1954 and various challenges posed to it.
Suggested strategy has addressed the issues in a comprehensive manner,keep it up !
Give examples of some countries who have successfully legalised the same sex marriage.
Good conclusion.
The content is good and well placed.
Try to write little big.
You have the potential of writing good answers, keep it up !
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction.
Work on presentation, leave some space between the lines and after the paragraphs.
You have explained the SMA in a good manner.
Explain briefly how the petition before the Kerala High Court represents a unique opportunity towards making marriage more exclusionary.
Way forward is well explained but conclusion is missing.
Conclude that it’s high time for our society to put an end to the homophobic tradition and make marriage, as an institution, as a legal concept, more accessible and egalitarian, less arbitrary and exclusionary.
Rest of the content is decent .
Work on handwriting, write neat and legible.
Keep writing, you will succeed.