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- In the introduction briefly narrate that the educational institutions in our society are of considerable importance.
- In the body discuss first the changing societal dynamics; nuclear families and working parents not being able to give enough attention to the children, at a time when social media
and technology is burdening the childhood with excess information, importance of schools have become even
More. E.g. – Blue whale game challenge leading children to commit suicide. Then move on to discuss the role educational institutions play. - Conclude writing the importance of future of children.
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Hi Swati
Good intro but try to summarise it.
You have explained the measures in a decent manner but before measures , explain the implications like-
-On Self: Loss of self-worth and confidence. Bad attributes like greed, jealousy, revenge,
violence are cultivated as a result. Though one can be a successful lawyer, engineer or a
doctor but one will remain as ethical dwarf without values.
-On Society: School is a building with four walls with a brighter tomorrow inside. If schools
fail to inculcate values, then future generation may be influenced by societal evils. Increase
in intolerance, radicalization, gender discrimination and crime may be seen.
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Hi KG
Good intro.
You have explained the impact in a good manner.
Content wise good attempt.
Try to use some quotes . In this you can write- “The aim of education is the knowledge, not facts but of values.” –William Ralph.
Good strucutre.
Keep writing.