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“Female literacy has a direct positive multiplier effect in tackling the problem of malnutrition in the country”. Comment. 10 marks

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  • In the introduction briefly explain the current scenario of malnutrition in the country.
  • In the body quote some relevant data in the beginning .Discuss the aspects of challenge for India; to achieve the third goal of SDG – good health and well-being by 2030, and then discuss how female literacy can be a game changer to achieve this goal. Discuss the efforts of the government in this direction, highlight some key policies.
  • Conclude that thus, a high priority to female literacy, in a mission mode through liberal scholarships for the girl child, would go a long way towards tackling this problem

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22 responses to ““Female literacy has a direct positive multiplier effect in tackling the problem of malnutrition in the country”. Comment. 10 marks”

  1. Deepika Saini Avatar
    Deepika Saini

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Deepika
      Good Introduction.
      You have correlate the maternal education with childhood malnutrition in a good manner.
      Good points but need to diversify your answer.
      Explain briefly how malnutrition is affecting education.
      Also mention some way forward like decentralized approach,awareness programme through anganwadi and ASHA worketrs etc.
      Conclusion is good.

  2. NJ_00 Avatar
    NJ_00

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi NJ
      Lackluster introduction, quote some relevant data of UNICEF,WB etc about the malnutrition in India.
      After the introduction write the correlation between mothers’ education and the nutrition levels of children then write about female illiteracy.
      Follow a proper structure .
      Also write briefly about the other aspect also i.e. higher level of education among mothers also had its adverse impacts on education For example children received meals less frequently etc.
      Your way forward needs more points like a decentralized approach should be promoted with greater flexibility and decision making at the state, district and local levels.
      Work on diversification of your content.
      Good conclusion.
      Keep writing,you will succeed.

  3. Vishesh Chaurasia Avatar
    Vishesh Chaurasia

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Vishesh
      Good introduction.
      Use of diagram is appreciable.
      After the introduction write the correlation between mothers’ education and the nutrition levels of children then write about female illiteracy.
      You have written the advantages of female literacy in general, that is not the demand of the question.
      Read mentor’s comment before writing , it will help you in writing better answer.
      Use proper headings and subheadings for better presentation.
      In the measures part , there is need to add more points like the ownership of Panchayati Raj and urban local bodies is to be strengthened over nutrition initiatives.
      Write the answer with respect to malnutrition .
      Adhere to the demand of the question.
      Work on handwriting, write neat and legible.
      Keep writing,you will improve.

  4. Venkatesh Avatar
    Venkatesh

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Venkatesh
      Try to finish your answer in maximum 2 pages.
      Lackluster introduction, cite some relevant data of UNICEF,WB etc about the malnutrition in India.
      After the introduction write the correlation between mothers’ education and the nutrition levels of children then write about female illiteracy.
      Use proper headings and subheadings.
      You have not mention the measures to be taken, always write some way forward.
      In this you can write that anganwadi workers, ANMs and ASHAs should be educated and help educate the mothers about motherhood, sexual practices, hygiene and sanitation in the rural areas.
      Brainstorm before writing.
      Work on content,read comprehensively to enrich it.
      Avoid scribbling while writing.
      Work hard,you will improve.

  5. Dakshina Moorthy Avatar
    Dakshina Moorthy

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Dakshina
      Good introduction.
      Discuss the aspects of challenge for India-to achieve the third goal of SDG – good health and well-being by 2030, and then discuss how female literacy can be a game changer to achieve this goal.
      Try to follow a proper structure to get better marks.
      You have only written the efforts of the government, also write what more should be done to eradicate this problem, write your own solutions.
      Lackluster conclusion, highlight the importance of female literacy and healthy India.
      Work on content.
      Improve your handwriting.
      Keep working hard !

  6. Teja Avatar
    Teja

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Teja
      Good introduction.
      After writing about the problem of malnutrition, explain how female illiteracy and malnutrition are correlated.
      Work on content.
      Always write some way forward , suggest some measures to be taken.
      In this you can write Mothers should be made aware of the right nutrition their child will need to stay strong and healthy. Also write that anganwadi workers, ANMs and ASHAs should be educated and help educate the mothers about motherhood, sexual practices, hygiene and sanitation in the rural areas.
      Lackluster conclusion, , highlight the importance of female literacy and healthy India.
      Work on basic grammar.
      Keep writing,you will improve.

  7. Sumona Dey Avatar
    Sumona Dey

    Kindly review

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Sumona
      Along with other things, quote some data of FAO,UNICEF,WB etc about he malnutrition in India.
      You have correlate the female illiteracy and malnutrition in a decent manner.
      Make flow chart little neat.
      Write the impact of malnutrition like anemia etc.
      Need to work upon writing language, there are so many grammatical and spelling mistakes, many of your sentences need to be rephrased. Improve it.
      Need to add more points in the way forward like the ownership of Panchayati Raj and urban local bodies is to be strengthened over nutrition initiatives. Also mention that mothers should be made aware of the right nutrition their child will need to stay strong and healthy.
      Read mentor’s comment before writing.
      Need to work upon content,read comprehensively to enrich it.
      Keep writing,you will improve.

  8. Chester Avatar
    Chester

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Chester
      Scan your copy properly .
      I am not able to read anything except the headings.
      Correlate between female illiteracy and malnutrition.
      Also mention the impact of malnutrition.
      Give some way forward like the ownership of Panchayati Raj and urban local bodies is to be strengthened over nutrition initiatives. Also mention that mothers should be made aware of the right nutrition their child will need to stay strong and healthy.
      Underline keywords.
      Keep writing !

  9. aastha gupta Avatar
    aastha gupta

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Aastha
      Good introduction.
      You have correlate the female illiteracy and malnutrition in a decent manner.
      Work on space management, write crisp and concise so that you can add more content in the given word limit.
      Discuss the aspects of challenge for India; to achieve the third goal of SDG – good health and well-being by 2030.
      ‘Conclusion is missing,highlight the importance of female literacy and healthy India.
      Overall a good attempt.
      Keep writing !

  10. vinay bhalekar Avatar
    vinay bhalekar

    Please review
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Vinay
      Good introduction.
      First correlate the female illiteracy and malnutrition then write about the impact.
      Along with government initiatives, write your own solutions also like you can write that a decentralized approach should be promoted with greater flexibility and decision making at the
      state, district and local levels.The ownership of Panchayati Raj and urban local bodies is to be strengthened over nutrition initiatives.
      Good conclusion.
      Try to cover different aspects to get better marks.
      Overall a decent attempt.
      Keep writing ,you will succeed.

  11. Parakh Sarda Avatar
    Parakh Sarda

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Parakh
      Good introduction.
      Avoid drawing a line between introduction and the body of the answer.
      First correlate the female illiteracy and malnutrition then write about the impact and role of female literacy.
      You have written the role of female literacy in general terms, mention specifically how it will solve the problem of malnutrition in the country.
      Adhere to the demand of the question.
      Way forward is decent.
      Good conclusion.
      Work on handwriting and avoid scribbling.
      Keep writing,you will succeed.

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