Mentor’s comment-
- In the introduction briefly set the context of the question.
- In the body explain how in times of a health crisis, Mahatma Gandhi showed exceptional care and extreme sternness. Quote the examples of South African plague that he handled. Explain that Gandhi’s ecological intelligence warned us of making a cult of materialism that will recoil on itself and have what we consume, consume us. That is staring us in the face today.
- Conclude with the need to recognize significance of Gandhian ecological intelligence and necessarily apply it.
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18 responses to “”Gandhi’s ecological intelligence warned us of making a cult of materialism that will recoil on itself and have what we consume, consume us.” Elaborate. 10 marks”
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Hi Deepika
Starting your answer with quote is appreciable.
Good introduction.
Refrain from monotony, give proper headings and subheadings .
You can give heading ‘ Gandhiji and his ecological sensibility’ . Then mention his views on industrialization, on recycling, on wildlife conservation and man and animal conflict etc.
Then explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Work on content.
Work hard, you will improve.
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Hi Taran
Your introduction does not make any sense, instead write that Gandhiji understood the concerns of the environment and its protection and talked about sustainable development and self-sufficiency.
Mention his views on industrialization, on recycling, on wildlife conservation and man and animal conflict etc.
You can mention that as early as in 1909 in his book, Hind Swaraj, he cautioned mankind against unrestricted industrialization and materialism.
Quote the examples of South African plague that he handled.
Then explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Conclusion is missing, conclude with the need to recognize significance of Gandhian ecological intelligence and necessarily apply it.
Work on content.
Do not get demoralized by the marks, keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Chester
Good introduction.
Try to derive the main demand of the question and write accordingly.
Elaborate the ecological sense of Gandhiji . Mention his views on industrialization, on recycling, on wildlife conservation and man and animal conflict etc.
You have explained the challenges in a decent manner.
Good conclusion.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Dakshina
Good introduction but try to write in simple language , the examiner might not be aware of this fictional character- frankenstein’s monster.
You have explained the Gandhiji’s views in a decent manner.
The content is good and well placed.
Good conclusion.
Overall a good attempt.
Work on handwriting.
Persistence is the key to success, keep writing , you will succeed.
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Hi Parakh
Gandhiji was a supporter not the support of environmentalism, avoid these type of mistakes.
‘model of village development model’ – write crisp.
Rephrase your introduction.
The question is not asking the reasons for occurrence of pandemics, adhere to the demand of the question.
Mention Gandhiji’s views on industrialization, on recycling, on wildlife conservation and man and animal conflict etc. Then explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Read mentor’s comment before writing.
Lackluster conclusion,conclude with the need to recognize significance of Gandhian ecological intelligence and necessarily apply it.
Work on content .
Do not get demoralized by the marks, keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Uttam
His ecological sense, not her, work on basic grammar.
Quoting the example of South African plague is appreciable.
But you have deviated from the demand of the question.
Instead of writing about the materialism in such detail, mention Gandhiji’s views on industrialization, on recycling, on wildlife conservation and man and animal conflict etc. Then explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Read mentor’s comment before writing.
Rephrase your conclusion.
Work on content and improve the presentation of the answer to get better marks.
Keep writing !
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Hi PS
Good introduction.
Refrain from monotony, give proper headings and subheadings to present your answer in a better way.
You have explained Gandhiji’s views in a decent manner.
Also explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Good conclusion.
A good attempt.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction.
You have explained Gandhiji’s views in quite a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Also explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Lackluster conclusion, conclude with the need to recognize significance of Gandhian ecological intelligence and necessarily apply it.
Overall a decent attempt.
Write crisp and concise.
Work in handwriting and refrain from monotony.
Work hard, you will succeed.
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Hi Vishesh
Good introduction, but need to summarise it.
Avoid drawing a line between the paragraphs.
How ‘maun vrat’ is a part of the ecological sense of Gandhiji ?
Do not write all you know, instead write according to the demand of the question.
Mention Gandhiji’s views on industrialization, on recycling, on wildlife conservation and man and animal conflict etc. Then explain briefly the need of these ideas in the present times.
Read mentor’s comment before writing.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
Work on handwriting and improve the presentation of the answer to fetch better marks.
Work hard, you will improve.