Mentor’s comment-
- In the introduction briefly talk about fishing industry in general.
- In the body explain the possible factors.
Also explain the impact of the presence of sophisticated technology that is highly employed in the handling of fish. - Conclude with the significance of the fishing industry.
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26 responses to “Fishing industry more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, why? Explain. 10 marks”
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Hi Deepika
Good introduction.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
You have explained the reasons in a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Good conclusion.
Avoid using short forms.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing !
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Hi Shubham
Lackluster introduction, write what the fishing industry includes , and how the livelihood of millions depends on it.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
Some good points in the reason part, but need to add more like –
-Numerous ports in this region facilitates the export-import facilities.
-Broken coast line provides excellent facilities of port and fishing harbour building.
-Cold climate facilitates preservation facilities.
-Nearby forest provides wood for ship building.
Work on content.
The question is not asking why needs to develop its fishing industry.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
Conclude with the significance of the fishing industry.
Avoid spelling mistakes and grammatical errors.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Taran
Rephrase your introduction.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
You have explained the reasons in a decent manner.
Lackluster conclusion, conclude with the significance of the fishing industry.
Work on grammar and sentence formation.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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HI Chester
Good introduction.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
Some good points in the reason part, but need to add more like-
–Broken coast line provides excellent facilities of port and fishing harbour building.
-Cold climate facilitates preservation facilities.
-Nearby forest provides wood for ship building.
-Deposition of abundant product by inland rivers. E.g.: Hoang Ho, Kitakami that is consumed by
fish.
Lackluster conclusion, conclude with the significance of the fishing industry.
Avoid grammatical errors.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Uttam
You have deviated from the demand of the question, the question is not about the Indian fishing industry.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
Read mentor’s comment before writing.
In the introduction, write what the fishing industry includes , and how the livelihood of millions depends on it.
Then mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
Then write about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere. you can give points like –
-–Broken coast line provides excellent facilities of port and fishing harbour building.
-Cold climate facilitates preservation facilities.
-Nearby forest provides wood for ship building.
-Deposition of abundant product by inland rivers. E.g.: Hoang Ho, Kitakami that is consumed by
fish.
Then conclude with the significance of the fishing industry.
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Hi Dakshina
You have written the significance of the fishing industry in the introduction, this should be the conclusion. You can write like fishing industry is concerned with taking, culturing, processing,
preserving, storing, transporting, marketing or selling fish or fish products.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
You have explained the reasons in a quite comprehensive manner.
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting.
Keep writing !
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Hi Parakh
Good introduction.
Use of flow chart in depicting the requirement of fishing industry is appreciable.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
You have explained the reasons in a decent manner.
Though concerns in the fishing industry was not asked in the question, but you have managed to touch this aspect also in the given word limit, appreciable.
Thumbs up for the structure.
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting.
Keep writing!
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Hi Venkatesh
Upload your sheet properly.
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Hi Venkatesh
Good introduction.
Some good points in the reasons but you can give more points like –
-–Broken coast line provides excellent facilities of port and fishing harbour building.
-Cold climate facilitates preservation facilities.
-Nearby forest provides wood for ship building.
-Deposition of abundant product by inland rivers. E.g.: Hoang Ho, Kitakami that is consumed by
fish.
Adhere to word limit, try to complete your answer in maximum 2 pages.
You should not write the concerns in this answer if the word limit exceeds.
You can use a map diagram for depicting the major fishing regions to get better marks.
Good conclusion.
Work on grammar and sentence formation.
Keep writing !
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Hi Amandeep
Good introduction.
Instead of writing the major regions of fishing industry, use a map diagram, this will make your answer presentable as well as save you some words.
Some good points in the reason part, but need to add more like-
-Numerous ports in this region facilitate export-import facilities.
-Broken coast line provides excellent facilities of port and fishing harbour building.
– Deposition of abundant product by inland rivers. E.g.: Hoang Ho, Kitakami that is consumed by
fish.
-Presence of shallow water
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting, write little small.
Underline keywords.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi PS
Scan your sheet in proper light.
Good introduction.
Before writing about why fishing industry is more developed in Northern Hemisphere than in Southern Hemisphere, mention the major fishing zones of the world, you can use a map diagram for it.
You have explained the reasons in a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Good conclusion.
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction.
Instead of using a flow chart, draw a map diagram , it will depict the regions in a presentable manner.
Reasons are explained in a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Good conclusion.
Underline keywords to convince the examiner easily.
Improve your handwriting, avoid scribbling.
Overall a decent attempt.
Persistence is the key to success, keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Anu
Good introduction.
You have explained the reasons in a comprehensive manner.
Thumbs up for the map diagram.
Write proper conclusion,conclude with the significance of the fishing industry.
The content is good and well placed.
Overall a decent attempt.
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