28th June 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

What do you understand by the phenomenon of Cloud Burst? How is it related to flash floods ? Why are hilly areas more prone to the ill effects of cloud burst? (250 Words)

Question 2)

“That the Himalayan glaciers are melting rapidly is known. But what is unnerving is that the rate of their erosion has doubled in recent years. This latest revelation calls for focused strategies to tackle its causes and consequences. ” Comment. (250 Words)

Question 3)

“Originally envisaged as a temporary tool to uplift India’s most marginalised communities — Dalits and tribals — and create a level playing field, reservations slowly has become an instrument of displaying and seeking political power.” Do you agree? (250 Words)

Question 4)

An organisation consists of a variety of individuals with varying values and degrees of motivation. What challenges do leaders face when forging a harmonious work culture in such an organisation? How can leaders engender a sense of inclusion in face of such diversity? (150 Words)

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57 responses to “28th June 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement”

June 29, 2019

Mahesh

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Mahesh
  Q,1)
  What is the required amount of rainfall so that the event can be considered a rain fall? Intro needs all these info. Make your intro more refined and value added.
  Good points in the 1st part of the main body.
  Overall the direction of your answer is good but they lack explanation. You have to explain a bit more. Use couple of statements to explain whatever you have said in single statement.
  Also presentation needs to be improved.
  
  Mark: 2
  
  Q.2)
  Always try to link the reports mentioned in the questions in your intro. Thats the better way to handle the flow of your intro.
  Good 1st part.
  Again you have just mentioned some points but failed to explain them. Points are decent but lack of elaboration takes the sheen out of your answer.
  Read the model answers to see they have been explained on the similar points.
  It will take some time but you will do better.
  Good way forwards.
  But conclusion is missing.
  
  Marks: 1.5
June 29, 2019

Chester

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Utkarsh
  Do mention the categorisation of cloud burst: the rain from a cloudburst is usually of the shower type with a fall rate equal to or greater than 100 mm (4.94 inches) per hour. These types of info are important.
  Also dam breaks, levee failure, rapid, snow melt and ice jams are also a reason for flash floods. DO mention them
  Give a little more insights regarding hilly terrain and cloud burst.
  2nd part of the answer has better insights, better elaborations and better depth.
  Good last paragraph.
  Marks: 4.5
June 29, 2019

Chester

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Good first half but while you did mentioned the consequences, but you failed to mention the causes of this speeding melting of the glaciers. It is specifically mentioned in the question. Read the questions carefully and try not to miss the important directives and keywords in the questions.
  Good way forward. Nothing is there that you left out.
  Work on your 1st part.
  
  Marks: 4
June 29, 2019

Chester

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Couple of suggestions:
  Do link the answer with the recent happenings like upholding of Maratha reservation in Maharashtra by the SC. Always mention in a statement how the issue is related to the recent events. ” In a significant judgment, the Bombay High Court has upheld the reservation given to the Maratha community. It has brought down the quantum of reservation from 16%, as determined by the state assembly, to 12-13%.”
  Secondly, give little more feedback in the 1st part of the answer.
  Lastly, give better and concrete way forwards. You have just skipped the tip of the iceberg here and just casually mentioned it.
  
  Marks: 2
June 29, 2019

Chester

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Almost pitch perfect answer.
  The only thing lacking are the examples which would have made this answer a real perfect one.
  The direction of the answer is excellent and language superb.
  Your usage of all the imp keywords is satisfactory. Overall quite a decent answer.
  
  Marks: 5.5
June 29, 2019

Mohsin Khursheed

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Mohsin
  
  Good intro.
  Give a little bit of insights on the reports mentioned and their key findings.
  Only climate change is mentioned in the causes of rapid melting of the glaciers. You missed imp points like rampant environmental pollution; air pollutants, such as black soot (carbon) and dust; Human activities like burning of fossil fuels, oil and gas drilling, deforestation, increasing land use in mountain regions, etc.
  Rest of the answer, the content and direction are fine.
  Good way forwards. For more points, read the model answer.
  
  Marks: 3.5
June 30, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Parth
  
  Decent intro.
  Give a little bit of insights on the reports mentioned and their key findings.
  Good use of flowcharts. Points there are good.
  Overall decent answer.
  Discussion and explanation are good and coverage better.
  Solid way forwards.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 30, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Do link the answer with the recent happenings like upholding of Maratha reservation in Maharashtra by the SC. Always mention in a statement how the issue is related to the recent events. ” In a significant judgment, the Bombay High Court has upheld the reservation given to the Maratha community. It has brought down the quantum of reservation from 16%, as determined by the state assembly, to 12-13%.”
  
  The point of NGOs and foreign funding or rise of dalit parties is totally irrelevant in the reservation debate. How come reservation has bearing on political parties. Instead mention how the reservation has created a new divide specially in education and career oriented space. How the lack of agrarian income has led to the call from agrarian groups like jats or marathas or kappus asking for reservation. How the intended benefit has not percolated to the bottom and how some of the groups in SCs or OBCs have cornered maximum benefits.
  
  Mention how reservation was envisaged as a tool for social upliftment and necessary evil in the post independence India etc.
  
  You did not explained how the mandate of reservation has changed overtime and whether the aspects of the mandates are justified or not.
  points are general in nature and such an important and relevant debate needs better points and inputs. Read the model answer please.
  
  Marks: 2
June 30, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Good 1st half of the answer though you can add points like age, gender, marital status, place of residence, etc. in the work domain.
  Good that you mentioned examples of Gandhi, some social media companies etc.
  Overall decent answer.
  read the model answer though.
  
  Marks: 3.5
June 30, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Prakhar
  
  Good couple of paragraphs
  But what is flash flood? What are the interlinks between cloud bursts and flash floods.
  Points like lack of adequate connectivity or poorly trained and understaffed DM personnel are not the reason for cloud bursts in Hilly areas. Instead they are the consequences or poor after-event-strategy related issues.
  Dont give general statements like these. Instead keep the focus on the discussion as in why the hilly areas suffer most of the cloud bursts.
  Good way forward and conclusion.
  
  Marks: 2
June 30, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Good intro.
  Give a little bit of insights on the reports mentioned and their key findings.
  Rest of the answer is fine and approached in a decent manner.
  Points are solid and explanation short yet firm
  Good attempt.
  
  Marks: 5
June 30, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  First if all, do mention the relevant article numbers like:
  Advancement of Scheduled Castes (SC) and the Scheduled Tribes (ST) OR any socially and educationally backward classes of citizens (Eg: OBC) OR economically weaker sections (EWS) – Article 15 (4), Article 15 (5), and Article 15 (6),
  Adequate representation of any backward class of citizens OR economically weaker sections (EWS) in the services under the State. – Article 16 (4) and Article 16 (6)
  
  Your point regarding 10 year clause of reservation only implies for the legislatures and not overall reservation. Try to differentiate it in your answer.
  What is your support arguments for reservation? Its missing in the answer.
  
  Good 2nd part of your answer.
  Language of the answer, throughout, has been amazing and flow was quite excellent. Work on your content a bit and keep better focus on the balance of your reservation debate.
  
  Marks: 3
June 30, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Good answer.
  Examples are apt and to the point.
  Content ok.
  For more inputs, you can read model answer.
  All in all, good answer.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 30, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Kunal
  
  Very good answer,
  You covered almost all the dimensions of question.
  Explanation is excellent without being too technical.
  Way forwards are well covered.
  Apt use of diagram
  Marks: 6
June 30, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Good intro.
  Give a little bit of insights on the reports mentioned and their key findings.
  Your coverage of the 1st part, regarding the consequences of the melting of glacier, is lengthy and the balance is disproportional in terms of equal weight of both parts.
  Points in both the parts are well covered and almost all the aspects are covered in fine manner
  Solid way forwards between the discussions.
  
  Marks: 5
June 30, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Do link the intro of the answer with the recent happenings like upholding of Maratha reservation in Maharashtra by the SC. Always mention in a statement how the issue is related to the recent events. ” In a significant judgment, the Bombay High Court has upheld the reservation given to the Maratha community. It has brought down the quantum of reservation from 16%, as determined by the state assembly, to 12-13%.”
  
  Also do mention some of the relevant constitutional provisions like:
  Advancement of Scheduled Castes (SC) and the Scheduled Tribes (ST) OR any socially and educationally backward classes of citizens (Eg: OBC) OR economically weaker sections (EWS) – Article 15 (4), Article 15 (5), and Article 15 (6),
  or
  Adequate representation of any backward class of citizens OR economically weaker sections (EWS) in the services under the State. – Article 16 (4) and Article 16 (6)
  
  Rest of the discussion is good. The content or the discussion is amazing and your command on the language is superb. Its good to read your answers and most of the times they do not disappoint.
  
  Marks: 4
June 30, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  All in all pitch perfect answer.
  The only thing lacking are the real life r hypothetical examples which would have made this answer a real perfect one.
  The direction of the answer is excellent and language superb.
  Your usage of all the imp keywords is satisfactory.
  
  Marks: 5.5
June 30, 2019

noira khan

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Noira
  Good intro.
  Give a little bit of insights on the reports mentioned and their key findings.
  Rest of the answer is well attempted.
  All the dimensions are covered and coverage is wide and deep.
  As always with your answers, its a decent attempt.
  
  Marks: 5.5
June 30, 2019

noira khan

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  There are couple of issues with the answer
  
  First, do link the intro of the answer with the recent happenings like upholding of Maratha reservation in Maharashtra by the SC. Always mention in a statement how the issue is related to the recent events. ” In a significant judgment, the Bombay High Court has upheld the reservation given to the Maratha community. It has brought down the quantum of reservation from 16%, as determined by the state assembly, to 12-13%.”
  
  Also do mention some of the relevant constitutional provisions like:
  Advancement of Scheduled Castes (SC) and the Scheduled Tribes (ST) OR any socially and educationally backward classes of citizens (Eg: OBC) OR economically weaker sections (EWS) – Article 15 (4), Article 15 (5), and Article 15 (6),
  or
  Adequate representation of any backward class of citizens OR economically weaker sections (EWS) in the services under the State. – Article 16 (4) and Article 16 (6)
  This is just an example and you can use language and content according to your own comfort.
  
  the discussion regarding reservation debate is not so much about its pros and cons but regarding the changing composition and demands of reservation. Instead it should have been mostly about arguments for and against reservation and how it has led to this position.
  
  Rather than keeping the way forward portion as a conclusion, you should approach this segment separately and give couple of suggestions regarding what should be done.
  
  Read the model answer in this regard.
  
  Language of the answer is really good.
  
  Marks: 3
June 30, 2019

RAVI VERMA

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June 30, 2019

pranab prakash

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Q1

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Pranab
  Give a little bit of insights on the reports mentioned and their key findings.
  Good and exhaustive points in the 1st part of the answer. Keep it up.
  Rather than discussing the importance of glaciers, discuss what will be the consequences of the melting of glaciers.
  Good way forwards.
  Overall language is decent. Presentation is also solid.
  
  Marks: 3.5
June 30, 2019

pranab prakash

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Very good answer
  All the concepts are well explained and all the dynamics have been covered in decent manner.
  Language and flow of the answer is superb.
  The only suggestion I would give is to shorten the length of your paragraphs (Sometimes they become to bulky. Avoid it.) and use diagrams in answers.
  All in all, very good answer.
  
  Marks: 6
June 30, 2019

pranab prakash

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Discussion is good.
  The debate has been captured in apt manner.
  The content or the discussion is amazing and your command on the language is superb. Nothing to pinpoint in the answer.
  
  Marks: 6
June 30, 2019

Sravya

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Sravya
  If you using flash while taking pics of your answers, then avoid it because it makes the answer unreadable. Use camscanner app for better picture quality.
  Content is ok.
  Good use of diagram.
  For more inputs, you can read model answer.
  All in all, good answer.
  Work on your presentation skills.
  
  Marks: 4
June 30, 2019

Sravya

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Half of the answer in each page is unreadable due to the reflection of the flash. Please avoid it.
  In the intro, do mention the report and after the intro, briefly discuss the key findings of the report.
  Only climate change and plastic waste are mentioned in the causes of rapid melting of the glaciers. You missed imp points like rampant environmental pollution; air pollutants, such as black soot (carbon) and dust; Human activities like burning of fossil fuels, oil and gas drilling, deforestation, increasing land use in mountain regions, etc.
  Picture quality in the 2nd page is not so good either. Its quite difficult to read.
  But whatsoever i was able to make out of it, the discussion was good in the 2nd part of the answer and points were exhaustive.
  
  Marks: 3
June 30, 2019

Sravya

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Do link the intro of the answer with the recent happenings like upholding of Maratha reservation in Maharashtra by the SC. Always mention in a statement how the issue is related to the recent events. ” In a significant judgment, the Bombay High Court has upheld the reservation given to the Maratha community. It has brought down the quantum of reservation from 16%, as determined by the state assembly, to 12-13%.”
  
  Also do mention some of the relevant constitutional provisions like:
  Advancement of Scheduled Castes (SC) and the Scheduled Tribes (ST) OR any socially and educationally backward classes of citizens (Eg: OBC) OR economically weaker sections (EWS) – Article 15 (4), Article 15 (5), and Article 15 (6),
  or
  Adequate representation of any backward class of citizens OR economically weaker sections (EWS) in the services under the State. – Article 16 (4) and Article 16 (6)
  
  In the debate of the reservation, you were not asked whether reservation is good or bad. No. You were asked to debate about the changing nature of the reservation and how and why other communities have started asking for it in various parts of the nation.
  
  Answer ends abruptly without discussing what is the way forward to the raging issue. You have uploaded same page twice.
  
  Marks: 2.5
June 30, 2019

Sravya

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  The direction of the answer is excellent and language superb.
  Work on your presentation skills though.
  Structure of the answer is solid too.
  Overall decent attempt.
  Keep writing.
  
  Marks: 4.5
July 1, 2019

sourav singh

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1. July 3, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Sourav,
  Please upload your answers on this page to get it reviewed.
  Thanks
2. July 3, 2019
  
  Vishvjeet Holkar
  
  Log in with facebook account…..when i logged in with Google account ,option to attach file was not visible….but with facebook it was……
3. August 29, 2019
  
  sourav singh
  
  thanks bro
  your efforts are highly appreciated.

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