20th June 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

The striking thing about modern India is that the men and women who made its history also wrote more authoritatively about it. In this context, highlight the literary contributions of B.R. Ambedkar, Jawaharlal Nehru and M.K. Gandhi.

Question 2)

Discuss the powers, functions and responsibilities of the office of Speaker in India. Recently it has often been criticised of violating the neutrality of the post. Comment. (250 words)

Question 3)

Indian BITs should strike a balance between the interests of foreign investors and those of the state. Why the new model of bilateral investment has been unable to attract FDI in the country? What changes should be brought to reform the bilateral investment treaty structure?(250 words)

Question 4)

There seems to be a fundamental contradiction between effectiveness and accountability. Comment. Why is accountability a necessary evil for good governance? Discuss. (150 words)

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June 20, 2019

Pankaj Lalwani

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Pankaj
  Whenever question is from polity, try to mention relevant article numbers from the constitution. It always helps in fetching more marks. For example here in the intro you could have mentioned that article 93 provides for the office of speaker and deputy speaker in the lok sabha…..
  
  Points in the main body are good but their presentation needs work.
  
  What are the recent controversies regarding its neutrality? Mention few recent examples.
  
  Good points in way forward and conclusion is decent too.
  
  Overall content wise the answer is decent but work on your presentation skills. The answers seems too much fragmented despite having all the necessary elements in it.
  
  Marks: 4
June 20, 2019

Pankaj Lalwani

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  What exactly is BIT?? Explain a bit more in intro about it.
  
  Main body is good but again work on your presentation. Language is good
  
  Conclusion is missing. Try not to miss it because its a habit which will ensure good returns from your answers.
  
  Overall good answer.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 20, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Prakhar
  
  Its a factual question and you covered it ok.
  
  You have to get more points in your main body of answer where you are discussing the contributions of these legends. There are plethora of examples to be given like (Gandhi) Indian opinion, Young India; (Nehru) National Herald, Glimpses of World History, An Autobiography, Letter to a daughter etc; (Dr. Ambedakar) “What the Congress and Gandhi have done to the Untouchables”, speeches etc.
  
  The more you mention works of these leaders the better the chances of getting more marks.
  
  Good conclusion.
  
  Marks: 3.5
June 20, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  In the intro, mention the article number which gives us the office of speaker (93).
  
  Your first part of the answer is good. You have mentioned relevant article and schedule numbers to back your points.
  
  You can remove the responsibilities discussion. Its not necessary. Instead you can discuss what are the reasons of this office losing its neutrality.
  
  Give little bit more points in your way forward like:
  In Ireland position of Speaker is given to someone who has built up credibility by relinquishing his or her political ambitions.
  Also, Indian Speakers are not made members of the Rajya Sabha after they demit office.
  But the British Parliament automatically elevates the Speaker to the House of Lords.
  The Committee, headed by V.S. Page, suggested that if the Speaker had conducted himself or herself in an impartial and efficient manner during the tenure of his or her office, he or she should be allowed to continue in the next Parliament.
  Anyone seeking the office of the Speaker might be asked to run for election on an independent ticket.
  Any Speaker should be barred from future political office, except for the post of President, while being given a pension for life.
  
  Answer ends abruptly without an apt conclusion.
  
  Marks: 2.5
June 20, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. June 24, 2019
  
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  Hi Kunal
  
  Intro is good.
  
  Overall near perfect answer in terms of language, discussion and structure. All the points are covered in wholesome manner and yet you managed to focus on many literary contributions of these leaders without going too much in details.
  
  Good attempt.
  
  Marks: 6
June 20, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  There are a few suggestions regarding this answer.
  
  Try to mention article and relevant schedule numbers in polity related questions. This lends weight to your answers and points. For example, just mention in the starting line of the intro that Article 93 of the constitution gives us the office of speaker and he continue with your intro. Similarly when you mentioned that he/she is the decision maker in anti defection rule then do mention its power comes from schedule 10. These are small things but goes a long way in making your answer better from good.
  
  Points in the main body and Way forwards are good.
  
  Marks: 4
June 20, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Briefly describe what BIt is.
  
  Nice approach and discussion in the main body of the answer. Points are easy and yet relevant.
  
  Way forwards are simple and to the point. Keep it up.
  
  Marks: 5.5
June 20, 2019

Kunal Aggarwal

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Good explanation in your intro.
  
  You addressed all the parts of the question. Language was simple and crisp. But try to quote some examples in ethics answers.
  
  The relationship between effectiveness and accountability has been discussed in apt manner.
  
  Marks: 5
June 20, 2019

pranab prakash

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Pranab
  
  Intro is up to the mark ans well framed.
  
  you have covered most of the contributions nicely with many relevant examples. While discussing the literary works, your commentary on their individual work as leaders is also really good.
  Overall very good answer.
  Keep writing.
  
  Marks: 5.5
June 20, 2019

pranab prakash

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Pranab there is a suggestion which i have given to many students and you need it too regarding this particular answer.
  
  While your points are good and explanation decent, try to mention article and relevant schedule numbers in polity related questions. This lends weight to your answers and points. For example, just mention in the starting line of the intro that Article 93 of the constitution gives us the office of speaker and he continue with your intro or in point regarding money bill just mention article 110 in bracket. These are small things but goes a long way in making your answer better from good.
  
  Give some examples of recent allegations of impartiality mentioned by the opposition parties. For example you can mention that recent “Aadhar bill’ categorisation gave an impression that speaker is working under whims of govt.
  
  your second part where you were supposed to give suggestions and way forward is missing. You can add points like:
  In Ireland position of Speaker is given to someone who has built up credibility by relinquishing his or her political ambitions.
  Also, Indian Speakers are not made members of the Rajya Sabha after they demit office.
  But the British Parliament automatically elevates the Speaker to the House of Lords.
  The Committee, headed by V.S. Page, suggested that if the Speaker had conducted himself or herself in an impartial and efficient manner during the tenure of his or her office, he or she should be allowed to continue in the next Parliament.
  Anyone seeking the office of the Speaker might be asked to run for election on an independent ticket.
  Any Speaker should be barred from future political office, except for the post of President, while being given a pension for life.
  
  Marks: 2
June 20, 2019

pranab prakash

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  introduction is good.
  you need to work on structuring answer. While you tried to cover various points and tried giving various angles to the BIt issue, your answer seemed commentary based here rather than points based.
  
  as there are many issues and suggestions regarding BIT and you can’t mention all, so structure your answer and categorize them and try to use bullet points in these kinds of questions..
  
  Try to be specific regarding your way forwards, Sometimes they are general in nature while question regarding them is too specific.
  
  do add conclusion summarizing the function and importance of BITs. in current scenario. keep writing.keep improving.
  
  Marks: 3
June 20, 2019

Kim Tae

Answer 1:
The British India saw a multitude of great leaders who were well educated individuals who were constantly in touch with the events happening at the global stage and also influenced with ideas and philosophies of other countries for eg. Liberty, Fraternity, Equality, Socialism, etc. They also were well read and thoughts of Voltaire, Montesquieu, Karl Marx, Adam Smith, Tolstoy and many more also had an impact on their psyche.

Leaders like Jawaharlal Nehru, BR Ambedkar and Mahatama Gandhi studied abroad, pursued career as a lawyer and meanwhile also got to witness different kinds of discrimination in their lives.

Pt. Jawaharlal Nehru wrote Glimpses of World History to describe the ongoing global events and their causes which also described India and her situation during World Wars, Russian Revolution, Global Depression etc. He also wrote about the concept of socialism and its birth and expansion in India in his book India’s Independence and Social Revolution. His letters to his daughter and his chief ministers have been published widely.

Mahatma Gandhi was a prolific writer, along with books his writings are also in the form of articles, essays, journals. He also founded and edited several newpapers/ journals including Opinion. Young India and Harijan. But his first well known writing is Hind Swaraj in 1909 in which he described his approach and guide to Indian Independence and scathing critiques of Western Civilization. He then wrote Satyagraha in Africa in 1924 which put forward his ideas about the power of “passive resistance, non violence” and literally “holding firmly to the truth” as the most effective weapon to gain Swaraj. His journal “Harijan” focused on upliftment of the lower caste people and their importance in society.

Dr. B R Ambedkar is still one of the most sought writer of the present era. He also had a personal library “Rajgrah” which was considered as the world’s largest private library. He wrote on many subjects and issues of India like Economy, Social issues, caste system, minorities, Buddhism, etc. Books like “Buddha and his Dhamma”, “Manu and Shudras”, “Riddles in Hinduism”, “The Annihilation of Caste” and “Bahishkrit Bharat” depicted the unjust division of society in Hinduism, the deplorable situation of lower caste people, causes for prevalent differentiation and how he found Buddhism more pragmatic religion. He was a proficient economist too and wrote books like “The problem of the Rupee: its origin and its solution” which highlights deep seated issues in the economy of India and its currency.

The people of Modern India still find these writings relevant and inspirational. The thoughts and ideas of these leaders will continue to live on as their names.

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Kim
  
  A very good answer.
  Covered almost all the relevant literary works of these leaders (Though you can add more relevant works of nehru)
  Approach is good.
  Try writing on paper with pen. Thats way better than writing on system. Make it a habit of writing answers using paper!
  Keep it up and keep writing.
  
  Marks: 4.5
2. June 26, 2019
  
  Kim Tae
  
  thankyou Sir for the feedback, I will work on it
June 20, 2019

Mahesh

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Mahesh
  
  Work on your intro. Also give more details as in which article extablishes the office of Speaker etc.
  
  These many points in the power and responsibility of speaker is not required. Its good that you tried to mention most of them but try to keep focus on the demands of the question. hence mention only those powers which are relevant for neutral or unbiased nature of the office of speaker like use of A 110 or 10th schedule or suspension of MPs etc…
  
  Similarly, not many points are needed while giving issues with the role of speaker. Just mention few and move on.
  
  While you tried to give way forward but try to mention points which are not generic. For example rather than saying that he/should uphold the value of const or give ample time to opposition parties etc, you have to write specifically what needs to be done to improve the situation and help the office of speaker. You can use points like:
  
  In Ireland position of Speaker is given to someone who has built up credibility by relinquishing his or her political ambitions.
  Also, Indian Speakers are not made members of the Rajya Sabha after they demit office. But the British Parliament automatically elevates the Speaker to the House of Lords.
  The Committee, headed by V.S. Page, suggested that if the Speaker had conducted himself or herself in an impartial and efficient manner during the tenure of his or her office, he or she should be allowed to continue in the next Parliament.
  Anyone seeking the office of the Speaker might be asked to run for election on an independent ticket.
  Any Speaker should be barred from future political office, except for the post of President, while being given a pension for life.
  
  Marks: 2
June 20, 2019

Chester

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Utkarsh
  
  Intro is good.
  
  main body needs more points and coverage. rather than giving couple of examples of literary sources from these leaders, you have give more examples. This is the demand because its a factual question.
  
  Structure is good.
  
  Marks: 2.5
June 20, 2019

Chester

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  While your points are good and explanation decent, try to mention article and relevant schedule numbers in polity related questions. This lends weight to your answers and points. For example, just mention in the starting line of the intro that Article 93 of the constitution gives us the office of speaker and he continue with your intro or in point regarding money bill just mention article 110 in bracket. These are small things but goes a long way in making your answer better from good.
  
  Give some specific examples of recent allegations of impartiality mentioned by the opposition parties. For example you can mention that recent “Aadhar bill’ categorisation gave an impression that speaker is working under whims of govt.
  
  Way forwards are good.
  
  Marks: 3
June 20, 2019

Chester

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Answer is well written but try to add some points regarding why we need better BIts model more than ever. here you have to mention the recent global issues like trade wars and importance of FDIs in Indian growth story.
  Structure of answer is really good.
  
  Marks: 4
June 20, 2019

Chester

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Utkarsh, it is a good answer, if importance of accountability in organisation was asked but the theme of the question is: “can accountability and effectiveness exist together and what should be the desired outcome?”
  
  Instead you discussed the importance and need of accountability in the organisation.
  
  You started really well but in the main body of the answer you lost the track.
  You should discuss the similarity and difference and issues with the accountability and effectiveness.
  
  Read the model answer.
  
  marks: 1
June 20, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Couple of suggestions.
  
  Try to add some points regarding why we need better BIts model more than ever. here you have to mention the recent global issues like trade wars and importance of FDIs in Indian growth story.
  
  In suggestion, always be specific. Dont just write “create a balance between investors and state’s interests.” Instead mention how can that balance be maintained and suggest concrete steps. General statements will not fetch great marks in exams.
  
  Points in the main body are good and explanation is decent.
  
  Marks: 2.5
June 20, 2019

Prakhar Bharadwaj

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  You sure your definition of efficiency and accountability are to the point? Read the model answer for this.
  
  Your main body is discussing the pros and cons of accountability in an organisation while the demand of the question is: “can accountability and effectiveness exist together and what should be the desired outcome?”
  
  You should discuss the similarity and difference and issues with the accountability and effectiveness.
  
  Read the model answer.
  
  Marks: 1.5
June 21, 2019

Shashank Mattoo

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  In terms of structure you dont need to discuss both models of BITs separately. If you want than use tabular form of comparison or just mention what changes does the new model bring to the table.
  
  Good intro.
  
  Good explanation and language. Way forwards are good.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 21, 2019

Shashank Mattoo

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Answer is good and explanation decent.
  
  Use more examples in ethics answers.
  
  Overall good attempt.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 21, 2019

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  One of the finest presentation and explanation of this question that we have come across.
  The only improvement is that you have to give real life examples to make your points relevant. This is necessary element for ethics answers.
  Good way forwards. Not many thought of writing how to improve this situation.
  
  Marks: 5.5
June 21, 2019

noira khan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  +1 for the intro and the way you approached the issue of recent FDI issues involving India.
  +1 for depth of answer
  +1 for explanation and language
  +1 for intuitive presentation with subheadings
  +1 for the relevant way forwards
  +1 for the apt structuring and flow of the answer
  
  Quite decent attempt.
  
  Marks: 6
June 21, 2019

noira khan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  While your points are good and explanation decent, try to mention article and relevant schedule numbers in polity related questions. This lends weight to your answers and points. For example, just mention in the starting line of the intro that Article 93 of the constitution gives us the office of speaker and he continue with your intro or in point regarding money bill just mention article 110 in bracket. These are small things but goes a long way in making your answer better from good.
  
  Apart from this flaw, nothing wrong with your approach in the answer. All the points and elements are covered in good manner. Very good way forwards. Fine attempt.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 21, 2019

noira khan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Intro is good.
  
  Overall near perfect answer in terms of language, discussion and structure. All the points are covered in wholesome manner and yet you managed to focus on many literary contributions of these leaders without going too much in details.
  
  Good attempt.
  
  Marks: 6
June 22, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Parth
  
  Very good answer..excellent in terms of discussion and examples and points…but again the issues of handwriting and presentation..rest of the answer is brilliant.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 22, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  give more details as in which article establishes the office of Speaker etc.
  
  These many points in the power and responsibility of speaker is not required. Its good that you tried to mention most of them but try to keep focus on the demands of the question. hence mention only those powers which are relevant for neutral or unbiased nature of the office of speaker like use of A 110 or 10th schedule or suspension of MPs etc…
  
  After discussing the examples of missteps by speakers, briefly discuss why these cts are bad why neutrality of the office of speaker is important in Indian parliament as well as democracy.
  
  Way forwards are decent and to the point.
  
  Marks: 3.5
June 22, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Answer is well written and explanation is crisp.
  Structure of answer is really good.
  Overall decent attempt again.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 22, 2019

Parth Ranjan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  One of the finest structure and explanation of this question.
  The only improvement is that you have to give real life examples to make your points relevant. This is necessary element for ethics answers.
  Good conclusion.
  
  Marks: 4.5
June 23, 2019

Varsha Chauhan

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1. June 24, 2019
  
  Varsha Chauhan
  
  Sir, I am a working professional and find it difficult to write four answers daily..so i might be late in posting but I ensure that I don’t check the model answers until my answer has been evaluated and write minimum 3 answers and make mindmaps from relevant sources for the rest of them. I look forward to your feedback so please pardon me for the delay but i hope that wont prevent my answers from being evaluated? I am cool with a late response and will try my best to submit the same day
2. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Hi Varsha. Not an issue. Even if you are late, then do not worry. Just comment after posting the answer that you have submitted the test and we will have a look.
3. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Intro is up to the mark ans well framed.
  
  you have covered most of the contributions nicely with many relevant examples. While discussing the literary works, your commentary on their individual work as leaders is also really good.
  Overall very good answer.
  Keep writing.
  
  Marks: 6
June 23, 2019

Varsha Chauhan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  This is among the very few answers which have mentioned article 93 in the intro!!! Always write article numbers as well as schedule numbers whenever possible in polity answers.
  
  These many points in the power and responsibility of speaker is not required. Its good that you tried to mention most of them but try to keep focus on the demands of the question. hence mention only those powers which are relevant for neutral or unbiased nature of the office of speaker like use of A 110 or 10th schedule or suspension of MPs etc…
  
  Good discussion in the flowchart
  
  All he way forwards are excellent and quite relevant. Keep it up
  
  Marks: 4.5
2. June 25, 2019
  
  Varsha Chauhan
  
  Sir, the first part of the question says discuss the powers and functions so i elaborated. I got your point in this question but for the future could you please guide if i should refrain from elaborating if there are two parts in a question or how should we address the keyword Discuss. Coz my thought process was that it says discuss and i shouldnt be missing out on any function or u would deduct marks. Does that apply to all questions?
June 23, 2019

Varsha Chauhan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  Tried well.
  overall answer is good.
  in body of answer, give more examples. Examples are necessary.
  Good use of diagrams and conclusion is very good.
  keep trying
  keep writing
  
  Marks: 4
June 24, 2019

Varsha Chauhan

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1. June 25, 2019
  
  Parth Verma
  
  intro and the way you approached the issue of recent FDI issues involving India are really excellent.
  depth of answer, explanation and language, presentation, flow of the answer and relevant way forwards are really commendable.
  
  Quite decent attempt.
  
  Marks: 6

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