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19th July 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

It is important to keep armed forces busy and well- mobilized to maintain them battle- ready, thus, their peace-time functions also have a strategic dimension. Elaborate.

Question 2)

India’s singular objective as a non-permanent member of the United Nations Security Council (UNSC) should be to help build a stable and secure external environment. Discuss.

Question 3)

What was the Kihoto Hollohan case? How does it hold importance in the context of recent events?

Question 4)

If evil or bad actions are the result of ignorance according to the virtue ethics, then why educated people get indulge in White Collar Crimes?

 

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69 responses to “19th July 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement”

  1. Prakhar Bharadwaj Avatar
    Prakhar Bharadwaj

    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Prakhar
      Decent answer.
      You have covered all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
      Fair way forwards.

      Marks: 6

  2. Prakhar Bharadwaj Avatar
    Prakhar Bharadwaj

    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good content.
      But do mention more inputs regarding “importance in the context of recent events.”
      Apart from that discourse is decent and detailed.

      Marks: 4.5

  3. Prakhar Bharadwaj Avatar
    Prakhar Bharadwaj

    Q4

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      More discussion is needed on the topic.
      Your 1st part is good.
      But you have to give more discussion on why educated people get indulge in White Collar Crimes.
      Read the model answer for that

      Marks: 3

  4. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
    Mohsin Khursheed

    Q1. MOJO9615J00A46183569

    1. Akhtar zamil Avatar
      Akhtar zamil

      good ..keep it mohsin bhai

    2. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
      Mohsin Khursheed

      NOT CHECKED

    3. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Mohsin
      Avoid such lengthy intro paragraphs.
      You misread the demand of the question.
      It asked about the ” peace-time functions also have a strategic dimension.”
      That means you have to discuss peace time tasks undertaken by the armed forces like games, rescue operations, R&D, natural disasters, intelligence gathering, securing civilian areas during insurgency or unrest, military exercises with other nation’s forces etc.
      Read the model answer in this regard.

      marks: 1

  5. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
    Mohsin Khursheed

    Q4. MOJO9615J00A46183569

    1. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
      Mohsin Khursheed

      NOT CHECKED

    2. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Avoid large paragraphs.
      Answer is good.
      Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
      Explanation and language crisp and effective.
      Keep writing like this.

      Marks: 5

  6. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please review ?

    1. Borne Avatar
      Borne

      Kindly ignore. I have posted individual answers again

  7. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    1

  8. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    2.

  9. sourav singh Avatar
    sourav singh

    Answers are in this link
    https://photos.app.goo.gl/g1KhkgGboFQcpZ9F8

  10. Murari Jha Avatar
    Murari Jha

    Not able to upload pdf or images . please look at this issue.
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  11. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
    Mohsin Khursheed

    Q2. MOJO9615J00A46183569

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Fair answer.
      You have discussed all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
      Fair way forwards.
      The answer is informative and detailed yet its crisp.

      Marks: 6

  12. avani k Avatar
    avani k

    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Avani
      You misread the demand of the question.
      It asked about the ” peace-time functions also have a strategic dimension.”
      That means you have to discuss peace time tasks undertaken by the armed forces like games, rescue operations, R&D, natural disasters, intelligence gathering, securing civilian areas during insurgency or unrest, military exercises with other nation’s forces etc.
      Read the model answer in this regard.

      Marks: 2

  13. avani k Avatar
    avani k

    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      You could discuss the conflict with details rather than writing as bullet points.
      Good way forwards.
      Direction of the answer is correct and you managed to break the answer into relevant sub headings.
      keep writing.

      Marks: 4.5

  14. avani k Avatar
    avani k

    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      The content and structure is quite good.
      But presentation needs improvement
      Answer has various start stop discussion and it looks fragmented.
      Whatever you have discussed, discuss it in in more coherent manner with less use of arrows. Use proper sentences.

      Marks: 4

  15. Murari Jha Avatar
    Murari Jha

    q2
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Murari
      The first and second parts of the answer are decent in terms of discourse.
      But you can curtail the discussion on the importance India’s membership in UNSC.
      The gained space and time should be utilized to give more and better suggestions.
      You can extra dimensions in way forwards like the climate change, global trading order, refugee crisis, rule based order etc.
      read the model answer for that.
      Marks: 4

  16. Murari Jha Avatar
    Murari Jha

    q3
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Apart from missing conclusion, there is nothing wrong in the answer.
      You have discussed all the angles with depth and good language.
      The sub headings are very good and content nice.
      The flow, presentation and way forwards are apt.
      Keep writing like this.
      Avoid cutting though.

      Marks: 5.5

  17. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
    Shivangi Uliana

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    1. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
      Shivangi Uliana

      *NOT CHECKED*

    2. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Shivangi
      Avoid lengthy paragraphs like you used in the the answer.
      Answer is good.
      Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
      Explanation and language crisp and effective.
      Avoid this kind of presentation.
      Minus marks for that.
      Marks: 4.5

  18. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
    Shivangi Uliana

    Q2. MOJO9710800D30462641

    1. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
      Shivangi Uliana

      *NOT CHECKED*

    2. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      You dont have to discuss the reasons for India being a member of UNSC.
      That is not relevant in the answer.
      You misjudged the demand of the question.
      u were supposed to discuss the global challenges in the worl right now.
      And how can India help solve them with the help of UNSC.
      It was not about pros and cons of the USNC permanent membership for India.
      The core demand was “How can India, as a non permanent member of UNSC, help build a stable and secure external environment.”
      read the questions carefully.

      Marks: .5

  19. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
    Shivangi Uliana

    Q4. MOJO9710800D30462641

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good intro.
      Decent answer.
      You have covered all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
      The language is good for ethics answer.
      Nothing to pinpoint.

      Marks: 5.5

  20. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please Review
    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good direction.
      But lack of content and depth makes the answer less effective.
      That means you have to discuss more peace time tasks undertaken by the armed forces like rescue operations, intelligence gathering, securing civilian areas during insurgency or unrest, military exercises with other nation’s forces etc.
      Read the model answer in this regard.
      Marks: 3

  21. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please Review
    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Answer lacks depth, discussion and right structure.
      Mention what are the present global uncertainties and challenges are.
      You can write points like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
      Then mention how can India help counter these issues.
      read the model answer.

      Marks: 2

  22. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please review
    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Answer lacks content and depth.
      the presentation and structuring are poor as well.
      You have to break down the demands of the question into small sub headings and discuss them.
      Read the model answer in that regard.

      Marks: 1.5

  23. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please review
    Q4

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      You discussed the examples of Hansal Mehta, policeman and companies.
      But you have to mention in terms of ethics why they do that?
      the discussion has to be detailed and informative.
      Avoid writing such short answers.

      Marks: 2

  24. pranab prakash Avatar
    pranab prakash

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    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Pranab
      Very good answer.
      You have covered almost all the important points.
      The direction of the discourse is decent and on right track.

      Marks: 6

  25. pranab prakash Avatar
    pranab prakash

    Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Answer is good.
      Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
      Explanation and language crisp and effective.
      Use subheadings for your discussion.
      That will be a better way for enhancing your presentation.

      marks: 6

  26. pranab prakash Avatar
    pranab prakash

    Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      The answer lacks structure.
      Discuss the issues and their way forwards separately.
      Plus you need more content in the global issues like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
      Then give proper way forward in separate sub heading.

      marks: 2.5

  27. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Project Osiris
      You misjudged the demand of the question.
      u were supposed to discuss the global challenges in the worl right now.
      And how can India help solve them with the help of UNSC.
      It was not about pros and cons of the USNC permanent membership for India.
      The core demand was “How can India, as a non permanent member of UNSC, help build a stable and secure external environment.”
      In the first part you had to discuss global issues like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
      Then give proper way forward in separate sub heading as in what can India do with these issues.
      read the questions carefully.

      Marks: 1.5

  28. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    4

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      The content and structure is OK.
      But presentation needs lots of improvement
      Answer has various start stop discussion and it looks fragmented.
      Whatever you have discussed, discuss it in in more coherent manner.
      Work on your presentation.

      Marks: 2.5

  29. Varsha Chauhan Avatar
    Varsha Chauhan

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Varsha
      Good intro.
      Decent answer.
      You have covered all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
      The language is good for ethics answer.
      Nothing to pinpoint.

      Marks: 6

  30. Vishvjeet Holkar Avatar
    Vishvjeet Holkar

    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Vishvjeet
      Very good answer.
      Points are comprehensive, well placed and apt.
      You have covered almost all the important points.
      The direction of the discourse is decent and on right track.

      Marks: 6

  31. Vishvjeet Holkar Avatar
    Vishvjeet Holkar

    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good direction but 1st part lacks content.
      You need more content in the global issues like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
      Way forwards are decent but better explanation is needed.

      Marks: 3.5

  32. Vishvjeet Holkar Avatar
    Vishvjeet Holkar

    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Answer is decent.
      Your discussion has all the elements and angles thats are necessary.
      Explanation and language crisp and effective.
      Presentation can be improved.
      But the depth of the answer is excellent.

      Marks: 5.5

  33. ria chaudhary Avatar
    ria chaudhary

    Q4
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Ria
      Answer is good.
      Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
      Explanation and language crisp and effective.
      Use subheadings for your discussion.
      That will be a better way for enhancing your presentation.

      Marks: 5

  34. ria chaudhary Avatar
    ria chaudhary

    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Avoid over explanation.
      Answer is good in terms of content and direction.
      Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
      Sub heading are well placed.
      Points have nice coverage and depth
      Language is decent but points are somewhere over explained. Avoid this kind of explanation .
      Minus marks for that.
      Marks: 4.5

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