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18th July 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

Recent Farmers’ agitations and suicide once gain highlight the discrepancies in inclusive development. In this reference, analyze the factors behind famer’s suicide with a reference to NCRB report. What steps are needed to break the vicious cycle?

Question 2)

How can an efficient public transport system achieve dual objective of lower carbon emission and healthy population? Analyse.

Question 3)

KUSUM aims to provide energy sufficiency and sustainable irrigation access to farmers. How far has it been successful in achieving its objectives? Critically analyse.

Question 4)

You are professor as well as a social activist. There is an educated and well employed couple in your vicinity who often fight on their personal issues. One day they started fighting as usual, starting from arguments, turning loud, slamming doors and finally the male partner resorting to physical violence, the cry of wife and children started coming out. People come out, but do not dare to go to them citing that it is their personal matter, so any interference would be unethical and uncalled for. Answer the following questions based on the above case: (a) Would you agree to be a bystander on the advice of the people that it is a personal matter of the couple? Give reasons. (b) Suppose you go to the flat of the couple and enquire what is wrong but the male member insists that they be left on their own as it is their personal matter and you should mind your own business. What would be your reaction? (c) Can police help in curbing this social malady by using legal authority and provisions? (d) What is your moral and ethical locus standi on intervention of neighbours to stop the domestic violence?

 

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67 responses to “18th July 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement”

  1. Ashok Reddy Avatar
    Ashok Reddy

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    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Ashok
      Good intro.
      After intro, mention some of the stats from the NCRB report because its an important aspect of the question.
      In the reasons, do mention issues like crop damage due to weather phenomenon and non universal access to formal credit.
      rest of the answer is decent

      Marks: 4.5

  2. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
    Mohsin Khursheed

    Q2. MOJO9615J00A46183569

    1. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
      Mohsin Khursheed

      NOT CHECKED

    2. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Mohsin
      Dont change the font size in the mid of sentence. It looks like your scrambling for the space and gives a bad taste to your answer.
      Rest of the answer is good.
      Your second part of the answer is excellent.
      You have covered all the angles and subheadings in perfect manner.
      Work on your presentation.

      Marks:5

  3. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
    Mohsin Khursheed

    Q4. MOJO9615J00A46183569

    1. Mohsin Khursheed Avatar
      Mohsin Khursheed

      NOT CHECKED

    2. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      In the c part, you have to provide the limitations of the approach as well.
      Your overall discussion is good but you have to give arguments of other sides as well. Like what are the challenges that you will face in a and b. What are the limitations at your own end.
      Rest of the discussion is good and detailed.
      Last part is well written.

      Marks: 5

  4. avani k Avatar
    avani k

    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Avani
      Good intro and first part.
      Flow chart is ok but more content is needed there.
      In the reasons, do mention issues like crop damage due to weather phenomenon and non universal access to formal credit.
      You can skip the discussion on “impact”
      You have already discussed the solutions in the 2nd part hence you dont need the sub heading of way forward. Way forward means what should be done in future.
      Good discussion in 2nd part as well.
      Marks: 5.5

  5. avani k Avatar
    avani k

    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good intro.
      Give better sub headings and try to write complete sentence. For example, rather than writing “Reasons” in the 1st sub heading, you can simply mention “Importance of public transport”
      The content is ok but structure needs better flow.
      Good way forwards.

      Marks: 4

  6. avani k Avatar
    avani k

    Q4

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      The arguments in all the parts are one sided. Though you mentioned some of the cons but their discussion needs more depth.
      In the c part, you have to provide the limitations of the approach as well.
      What are the challenges that you will face in a and b. What are the limitations at your own end?
      Rest of the discussion is good and detailed.

      Marks: 4

  7. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Hi Team

    Please review

    1. Borne Avatar
      Borne

      Please ignore. I have again posted answers to the questions separately

  8. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    1

  9. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    1.ans

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Project Osiris
      One page’s orientation is wrong and second pa not readable due to the shine of the flash of your device.
      Good intro.
      After intro, mention some of the stats from the NCRB report because its an important aspect of the question.
      In the reasons, do mention issues like crop damage due to weather phenomenon and non universal access to formal credit.
      Decent way forwards.
      But answer ends abruptly.

      Marks: 3

  10. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    2.

  11. sourav singh Avatar
    sourav singh

    Answers are in this link
    https://photos.app.goo.gl/8pkMDMm7L83BBRZP7

  12. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
    Shivangi Uliana

    Q3. MOJO9710800D30462641

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Shivangi
      The necessary balance in the discussion is missing.
      You have to give arguments of both sides like what are the issues and challenges with the scheme.
      rest of the answer is good.
      Points in 1st and 2nd part are good and detailed.
      Good conclusion.

      Marks: 3.5

  13. Shivangi Uliana Avatar
    Shivangi Uliana

    Q1. MOJO9710800D30462641

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Very large intro. Avoid it. Dont discuss the reasons in the intro itself.
      1st part of the answer lacks necessary depth.
      There are multiple reasons cited by the NCRB report. Use them.
      Like banking sector exerting pressure for recovery of loans; problems in maintaining farm livestock; problem in getting credit at good terms and conditions; issue of crp damage due to bad weather; absence of mechanization, Insufficient transport facilities, Farm population per hectare increased whereas per-capita income has declined, Diversion of farm land into non-agricultural land, APMC and local traders exploiting farmers, High input cost and worsened quality of soil due to excessive use of fertilizers, Political incentives given to the farmers’ family after suicidal death by politicians further motivates other farmers to take the step at the cost of family welfare etc.
      Decent way forward.

      Marks: 4

  14. Murari Jha Avatar
    Murari Jha

    q1
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Murari
      Quite a good discussion.
      But avoid so much cutting in your answer.
      Your coverage of the answer is good and detailed.
      Keep it up.

      Marks: 6

  15. Murari Jha Avatar
    Murari Jha

    q2
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      The issue of over cutting needs to be rectified.
      Answer ends abruptly. Try to give conclusion.
      Apart from that, the structuring and content of the answer are excellent.
      All the major elements are covered.
      Keep it up.

      Marks: 5

  16. Murari Jha Avatar
    Murari Jha

    q3
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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Do not write solution at the start. Its intrinsic that this is the answer!
      Apart from cutting, excellent answer.
      Your structuring is really good.
      Your way of dividing discussion into various small sub headings are on good line and an unique practice.
      The points are on right track.
      All in all very good attempt.

      marks: 6.5

  17. Kunal Aggarwal Avatar
    Kunal Aggarwal

    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Kunal
      Good intro.
      After intro, briefly mention points and stats given by the NCRB report as in the trend of increasing suicides and geographical areas etc.
      Your discussion in 1st oart is OK but you can add more points like Like banking sector exerting pressure for recovery of loans; problems in maintaining farm livestock; problem in getting credit at good terms and conditions; issue of crp damage due to bad weather; absence of mechanization, Insufficient transport facilities, Farm population per hectare increased whereas per-capita income has declined, Diversion of farm land into non-agricultural land, APMC and local traders exploiting farmers, High input cost and worsened quality of soil due to excessive use of fertilizers, Political incentives given to the farmers’ family after suicidal death by politicians further motivates other farmers to take the step at the cost of family welfare etc.
      Decent way forward.
      Language is good.

      Marks: 4

  18. Kunal Aggarwal Avatar
    Kunal Aggarwal

    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      A bit lengthy intro.
      In fact all the paragraphs are on the wrong side of the prescribed length!
      Avoid habit.
      Coming to your content, it is good and balanced.
      But after intro, briefly mention what is wrong with our current public transport system. Only then your answer will have some background and platform to build upon.
      Language is decent.

      Marks: 5

  19. Kunal Aggarwal Avatar
    Kunal Aggarwal

    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good intro.
      But the main body has discussed only the challenges or issues with the scheme.
      What are the intended benefits or success of the scheme?
      This will bring necessary balance to your answer.
      Rest of the discussion is wonderful.
      Good conclusion.

      marks: 3.5

  20. Kunal Aggarwal Avatar
    Kunal Aggarwal

    Q4

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      In the c part, you have to provide the limitations of the approach as well.
      Your overall discussion is good but you have to give arguments of other sides as well. Like what are the challenges that you will face in a and b. What are the limitations at your own end.
      Rest of the discussion is good and detailed.
      Explanation is crisp yet detailed.
      Avoid writing in one flow. Give some break in your discussions.

      Marks: 5.5

  21. pranab prakash Avatar
    pranab prakash

    Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Pranab
      Good intro.
      After intro, briefly mention points and stats given by the NCRB report as in the trend of increasing suicides and geographical areas etc.
      Read the model answer for more points in the 1st part. When discussing something’s reason from a report, then do mention the reasons cited in that report.
      Very good 2nd part.
      Language is good.

      Marks: 4

  22. pranab prakash Avatar
    pranab prakash

    Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      There are multiple scope of improvements in the answer.
      After intro, mention the issues of the present public transport system.
      You discussed the way forwards right in the beginning. But you were supposed to give points regarding public transport system and dual objective of lower carbon emission and healthy population.
      Only then you should come to the way forward part.
      Points in way forward are ok.
      Avoid half baked answers.
      Marks: 1.5

  23. pranab prakash Avatar
    pranab prakash

    Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Structure of the answer is good but content needs more discussion and depth.
      Read the model answer in that regard.
      Try to be more detailed in your approach Pranab.

      Marks: 3.5

  24. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please Review
    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Mud Borne
      Good intro.
      After intro, briefly mention points and stats given by the NCRB report as in the trend of increasing suicides and geographical areas etc.
      Your discussion in 1st oart is OK but you can add more points like Like banking sector exerting pressure for recovery of loans; problems in maintaining farm livestock; problem in getting credit at good terms and conditions; issue of crp damage due to bad weather; absence of mechanization, Insufficient transport facilities, Farm population per hectare increased whereas per-capita income has declined, Diversion of farm land into non-agricultural land, APMC and local traders exploiting farmers, High input cost and worsened quality of soil due to excessive use of fertilizers, Political incentives given to the farmers’ family after suicidal death by politicians further motivates other farmers to take the step at the cost of family welfare etc.
      Good way forward.
      But answer ends abruptly. Give conclusion.

      Marks: 4.5

  25. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please Review
    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Answer starts and ends abruptly with least amount of discussion.
      It is not clear whether it is 1st part or way forward.
      After intro, mention the issues of the present public transport system.
      Then you were supposed to give points regarding public transport system and dual objective of lower carbon emission and healthy population.
      Only then you should come to the way forward part.
      Avoid half baked answers.

      Marks: 1

  26. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please Review
    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      What is the scheme about?
      Your answer is again half baked and just finished under one page.
      Read the model answer.
      This kind of structuring and presentation is not good for actual exam.
      You have to have proper structure and depth in your content.

      Marks: 1

  27. Borne Avatar
    Borne

    Please Review
    Q4

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Once again half baked answer.
      There is no depth and width in the discussion.
      In ethics answers, you have to look for arguments from both side and never present yourself as superior or rigid.
      In the c part, you have to provide the limitations of the approach as well.
      You have to give arguments of other sides as well. Like what are the challenges that you will face in a and b. What are the limitations at your own end.

      Marks: 3

  28. project _osiris Avatar
    project _osiris

    2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Do not start the answer right away.
      Give some intro.
      Poor structure and flow.
      Presentation needs lot of work.
      Points are placed in haphazard manner.
      What are the challenges in present day public transport system?
      Read the model answer.

      Marks: 2.5

  29. Varsha Chauhan Avatar
    Varsha Chauhan

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    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Varsha
      Your overall discussion is good but you have to give arguments of other sides as well. Like what are the challenges that you will face in a and b. What are the limitations at your own end.
      Rest of the discussion is good and detailed.
      Explanation is crisp yet detailed.

      Marks: 5.5

  30. Vishvjeet Holkar Avatar
    Vishvjeet Holkar

    Q1

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Vishvjeet
      Quite a good discussion.
      But avoid so much cutting in your answer.
      Your coverage of the answer is good and detailed.
      Good flow chart

      Marks: 6

  31. Vishvjeet Holkar Avatar
    Vishvjeet Holkar

    Q2

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      1st part is good.
      Your discussion in that part is decent and has necessary depth.
      But 2nd part needs more work.
      Give proper way forward.
      Try to explain a bit more.

      Marks: 3.5

  32. Vishvjeet Holkar Avatar
    Vishvjeet Holkar

    Q3

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Good balance and discussion in the answer.
      Points are well placed.
      Intro is decent
      Conclusion can be made stringer.
      Points in way forward are excellent.
      But do explain bit more.

      Marks: 5

  33. vinay bhalekar Avatar
    vinay bhalekar

    Q1 MOJO9620O00D18665402

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Hi Vinay
      Near perfect answer.
      Coupled with good handwriting, the presentation, structure and content are fine too.
      Your points have necessary depth and width.
      Discussion is all encompassing.
      Very good attempt. Keep it up.

      Marks: 7

  34. vinay bhalekar Avatar
    vinay bhalekar

    Q2 MOJO9620O00D18665402

    1. Parth Verma Avatar
      Parth Verma

      Excellent answer.
      Your structuring is really good.
      All the parts are dealt with nicely and perfectly.
      The points are on right track.
      All in all excellent attempt.

      marks: 6.5

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